Tutorial Feedback with Helen

This is the feedback I have received from Helen regarding my progress and my progress as a team member throughout there unit so far. Some things mentioned that I need to improve on is making the script more chatty rather than formal and informational. It is a bit too 'newsy' at the moment and therefore needs to become more inviting and engaging. We need to assume that the audience knows absolutely nothing about what we are talking about and in order to do this we need to forget all the knowledge we already have and start from the very simple things like setting up who the interviewee is and what they do. It's important that we do this because otherwise the audience gets confused and no one knows who this person is. It's important that we let the information breathe. What is meant by this is that we give the audience some commentary and then break it up with some GVs and accompanying music. It doesn't have to be long, however having this will allow the audience to process the information given without being overwhelmed. We need to link the last thought to the next to avoid confusion and maintain our audiences confidence. In order to help us keep track of time and pacing of our film, we will need to add in a 3rd column to our script and state how many seconds or minutes the scene will take place for. The average person speaks 3 words per second. It is important to pull back the presenters speaking time when having an interview as the interviewee will talk a lot. We don't want them to be too long or give away anything important, like the fact the birds are dying out, too quickly or the plot has no where to go.

These are all things I shall work on with my team and create a better script for our documentary.